GCE English Language. Exemplar responses. Unit 1 6EN01

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1 GCE English Language Exemplar responses Unit 1 6EN01 June 2013

2 Candidate A

3 Examiner commentary: - recognises mode the modal choice of adverts in holiday brochures is clearly written, and that formality varies with audience (point about SE lacks sophistication) examples from text illustrate point - field identified linked and to identity - function linked to promotion, illustrates with language (wanders into question 3) - recognises differences in tenor between the groups, Group A place an emphasis on the idea they will look after your family, as younger holidayers will not pay so much attention to the security at the resort, Group C texts use the names of famous landmarks. Examiner marks: 7

4 Candidate B

5 Examiner commentary: - recognises mode - field not explained - function identifies persuasion an aesthetically pleasing image in your head supported with language features stunning, great, perfect (wanders into question 3) - identifies different needs of audience with no discussion Examiner marks: 3

6 Candidate C

7 Examiner commentary: - identifies written mode - field identifies modifiers but calls them adjectives, this is really a confused point about the noun, or the persuasive nature of hyperbole (which should be function, The field is of course holidays. Because of this, many adjectives such as fantastic pool are used. They are used in a hyperbolic way to exaggerate the hotels or resorts assets - identifies the multi function of advertising in family holidays with examples - identifies the field of partying and the use of proper nouns for groups B and C - discusses the friendly tenor of all groups, identifying the function of pronouns and colloquial terms Examiner marks: 6

8 Candidate D

9 Examiner commentary: - identifies the mode - misunderstands the mode through the planning point - colloquialisms used to converge is a qu.3 point - field is identified with some accurate description

10 - confused point, there is a semantic field of business and a level of maturity, emphasising that they are probably targeting adults and businessmen as their audience - the language points in the last question are misplaced Examiner marks: 2

11 Candidate E

12 Examiner commentary: - good point about names but not supported with any knowledge of the key constituents of contextual factors, your not, and you also is an awareness of audience but no knowledge or positioning of this knowledge - reference to phrases is everyday - good discussion about sales power, curiosity..meaning more questions therefore more sales power to the author/company

13 - awareness of selling techniques is good, up close and personal positioned as tailored to you, quoted extracts are described as a magical and different effect Examiner marks: AO2 2 AO3 1 Overall 2+1 = 3

14 Candidate F

15 Examiner commentary: - identifies the imagined perfect holiday for a middle-aged woman and child., These idealised views of the perfect holiday have been intertwined into the contextual information of the texts in group A. This shows an emerging but unsecure understanding of the writing crafting language for audience tastes - discussion of tenor and the pronoun is good - the capitalisation point is good but the confusion keeps this script at the bottom of band 2, therefore attracting attension to a part of the context that is part of the prepared reading of the text. - Cruises have a different function? - fair point about historical places used as implied evidence for the text being aimed at older people Examiner marks: AO2 2 AO3 2 Overall 2+2 = 4

16 Candidate G

17 Examiner commentary: - discussion of fun-filled family times attracting younger people., deconstruction of phrase shows an understanding of linguistic methods - identifies a semantic field of discovery used to hook reader - empty adjectives are identified as a persuasive tool, and an awareness of the role of the modifier in emphasis is recognised - point about simple lexis keep this at the bottom of band 3 - point about educated people knowing about the Pope and Vatican City is a very good point, student acknowledged the exclusive nature of this knowledge (from a young person s point of view) Examiner marks: AO2 3 AO3 3 Overall 3+3 = 6

18 Candidate H

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20 Examiner commentary: - identifies elliptical elements feature relates to food - verb related to young people, through culture and sociolect - junk food related to teenager and exampled as concrete nouns - modifiers linked to audience with good discussion - alliteration of friendly food linked to fun, positive connotations and engagement of young audience - fave cited as slang for teenagers (not very secret or young exclusive but I support this claim) good point about linguistic solidarity could potentially lead to convergence - metaphoric imperative hit the beach makes good point of brevity and audience sensibilities - good discussion of daddy noting metaphoric use and sociolect - parenthesis described as theatrical inclusion

21 Examiner marks: AO2 4 AO3 8 Overall 4+8 = 12

22 Candidate I

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24 Examiner commentary: - links skinted and minted to sociolect - explains the importance of use fave to appeal to young people - semantic field of crowds are related to the young - good point about the culture of proper nouns e.g. WI-FI but not linked to the mystery text - imperative linked to passive nature of teenagers - Old English influences appealing to young? Mono-syllabic lexis appealing to young? Examiner marks: AO2 2

25 AO3 4 Overall 2+4 = 6

26 Candidate J

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28 Examiner commentary: - declarative sentences to describe activities - direct address to speak to audience - fun- filled family times linked to be sure to share because families share - daddy is misunderstood - excludes group C but identifies the use of adjectives - noun phrase sun-soaked, famous theme park, linked to hearty steaks Examiner marks: AO2 3 AO3 5 Overall 3+5 = 8

29 Candidate K

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32 Examiner commentary: - good point about uncertainly but backed up with ellipsis, which it isn t - outline of contextual factors shows a basic understanding beyond everyday experience - relevant point about pauses linked to lack of confidence - lacks understanding of mode, the lack of structure in this transcript is clearly shown through the construction of the pauses and the rushed informality language - claims use of colloquial words, enormous lucidity sensitivity and innate - - continues to tell use what it is about - review of contextual factors and a claim of presentation of self

33 Examiner marks: AO1 4 AO2 5 AO3 6 Overall = 15

34 Candidate L

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38 Examiner commentary: - overview of content of text A is accurate, pauses and fillers and planned outline are plausible - imperative inaccurate but talks implicitly about the footing of the speaker and refers to politeness but without discussion or terminology - discusses inclusion but does not name it or use terminology - discussion of we is very insightful and a subtle reading of a subtle point but it is cited as an adverb - links exciting lexis to promoting function - mitigated imperative cited as a subtle imperative, spots the direction of the speaker - identifies that formality changes with known audience trainee teachers and general public - spots the promoting nature of text 2 Examiner marks: AO1 7 AO2 9

39 AO3 16 Overall = 32

40 Candidate M

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43 Examiner commentary: - links pauses and false starts to nerves - links adjectives to scripted planning - spots relationships between peer group address and instrumental power, This creates the illusion that the speaker may be quite comfortable with the audience, but still act professional - links pronoun I to dominance and then discusses the gender impact of this - modal auxiliary linked to confidence is then confused - good grasp of word but misunderstands figurative use of waking - hedges linked to lack of confidence - rhetorical construct understood Examiner marks: AO1 7

44 AO2 10 AO3 18 Overall = 35