Pearson Edexcel Certificate/ International GCSE English Language KEA0 01/4EA0 01 The purpose of this pack is to provide centres with marked exemplars of responses to the June 2015 examination. Included in this pack: Questions from June 2015 paper Marked responses Examiner commentary 1
SECTION A: READING... 3 QUESTION 3... 6 SCRIPT 11:... 6 SCRIPT 12:... 7 SCRIPT 13:... 8 SCRIPT 14:... 9 SCRIPT 15:... 10 QUESTION 4... 11 SCRIPT 16:... 11 SCRIPT 17:... 14 SCRIPT 18:... 17 SCRIPT 20:... 23 SECTION B: READING AND WRITING... 27 QUESTION 5... 30 SCRIPT 21:... 30 SCRIPT 22:... 32 SCRIPT 23:... 36 SCRIPT 24:... 39 SCRIPT 25:... 41 QUESTION 6... 44 SCRIPT 26:... 44 SCRIPT 27:... 47 SCRIPT 28:... 50 SCRIPT 29:... 52 SCRIPT 30:... 54 SECTION C: WRITING... 56 QUESTION 7... 57 SCRIPT 31:... 57 SCRIPT 32:... 61 SCRIPT 33:... 63 SCRIPT 34:... 67 SCRIPT 35:... 69 2
SECTION A: READING 3
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QUESTION 3 SCRIPT 11: S11 mark 3 A response that begins without scoring marks but then shows it can comment and support on Larwood s toughening experiences as a miner and his place in the family of miners. Other points are less well explained. 6
SCRIPT 12: S12 mark 4 The opening point about pain is valid and further explained, as are the comments about the surroundings, quality of life and sense of pride. 7
SCRIPT 13: S13 mark 5 Receives full marks because of the range of points made and the quality of explanation. This answer makes two separate points about his coal mining experience: that it showed how the miners held him in high regard and how it showed his personal determination. This is indicative of a perceptive response to the question. 8
SCRIPT 14: S14 mark 2 A brief response that contains little explanation or development but does make points about respect and the harsh conditions of the mine. 9
SCRIPT 15: S15 mark 2 A passing reference to the mines being cold and sooty. The final point about how Larwood is regarded is better and contains some element of explanation. 10
QUESTION 4 SCRIPT 16: 11
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S16 mark 7 Shows a sound engagement with the text through a number of points that are well supported; other comments such as those about his appearance in the second paragraph lack weight and are largely simple. Is aware of the contrast in reactions between the men and the boys which shows sound understanding, but which shows why this answer does not score higher as it makes very little of this point. The same can be seen with the comment on the word royal. In a best fit approach the range and quality of insights compensates for the weaker response to language and technique on the final page. 13
SCRIPT 17: 14
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S17 mark 12 A very strong response that scores full marks and shows a perceptive appreciation of the writer s presentation of Larwood. There is a good range of comments on technique and an ease in supporting with crisp and aptly chosen quotations. This answer recognises and comments upon the tone of reverence and comments on the deification of Larwood, which is a very strong section. It is also strong upon his dual status as common man and legend and is perceptive and well supported throughout and meets all of the criteria for level 4. 16
SCRIPT 18: 17
S18 mark 11 Also a level 4 response that is quite different to S17 in how it achieves its high mark. We see a strong opening paragraph and its references to starstruck and Martin Luther King show an able candidate interpretation and making real sense of the text. The section about the boys shows an awareness of tone and is able to explain and support this insight. The answer intersperses comments upon technique and supports well. 18
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S19 mark 8 The opening paragraph somewhat lacking in clarity but after that the writer shows a sound understanding with some sections being strong, such as the comments about how he is regarded in 21
paragraph 2. Some quotations are long and lack focused selection. The quality of this answer improves as it reaches the end with some good points made about technique in the final paragraph. 22
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S20 mark 6 A level 2 response based upon the understanding it shows balanced against a weak response with regards to technique. Comments about the writer s admiration and the presentation of Larwood as strong and proud figure are two of the strongest features of this answer. 26
SECTION B: READING AND WRITING 27
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QUESTION 5 SCRIPT 21: 30
S21 mark 5 An unusual response that begins by trying to make comments that apply equally to both climbers but with only limited success. There are some valid comments however many of them are quite general in nature. Page 2 is devoted to Joe and there is almost nothing on Simon. Is able to make some comments on technique and offer support about Joe. 31
SCRIPT 22: 32
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S22 mark 9 A perceptive response which is strong on the contrast between the two climbers and which provides a good level of support throughout. A wide range of techniques is identified with some subtle points, such as the interpretation of the word ragged in the final paragraph. 35
SCRIPT 23: 36
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S23 mark 2 A level 1 answer that lacks detail of any kind and does not delineate between the two climbers. The nature of the generalities can be seen in the final paragraph where the comments made about imagery could apply to any text and there is no mention of Joe or Simon. 38
SCRIPT 24: 39
S24 mark 4 Generally sound as it establishes the key differences between the two climbers. There is some comment on technique with rhetorical questions and verb choices being identified. There is some misunderstanding at times, such as that Simon feels upset for his friend. Mostly clear but limited range of comments keep this at the bottom of level 2. 40
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S25 mark 10 A very strong response that scores full marks. It is genuinely perceptive, very strong upon technique and upon support. Demonstrates an ability to see multiple interpretations on more than one occasion. Able to sustain a high quality of response throughout the answer. 43
QUESTION 6 SCRIPT 26: 44
S26 mark 10 An answer that scores full marks because of its ability to communicate impressive accuracy and control throughout. The opening sentence which challenges the reader through the well constructed 45
narrative to the shift into second person in the final paragraph all exhibit a control that is impressive without ever being ostentatious or affected. Good variety of sentences and control of punctuation throughout and the easy creation of pathos, character and suspense. Achieves in excess of what is needed to reach a mark of 10. 46
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S27 mark 10 Although not as sustained as S26, this answer does everything needed to reach full marks. The impressive opening paragraph engages the reader and shows control of sentence variety, simile and repetition all deliberately crafted for effect. The paragraph structure creates tension and moves the drama forward and the move to future tense signals a fitting conclusion to the drama. 49
SCRIPT 28: 50
S28 mark 2 A level 1 answer that communicates at a basic level because of its lack of control of expression and lack of accuracy. Verb control and tenses are not secure and the drama is not always easy to follow. However, it does tell a whole tale with a beginning, middle and end and creates a sense of feeling in the incident described all of which place it in the middle rather than the bottom of level 1. 51
SCRIPT 29: 52
S29 mark 6 An engaging opening that is not sustained. Generally clear communication with some successful use of a variety of devices places this in level 2. Some elements of the narrative are not clear and some elements are weak such as the sentence, It hurt, badly to describe the horrific injuries sustained. 53
SCRIPT 30: 54
S30 mark 4 A response that communicates clearly is paragraphed accurately and makes use of dialogue which is generally accurate. The opening paragraph with its obsession with times after an exciting first sentence illustrates how this answer loses its connection with the reader. There are homophonic errors and an idiolect slip into the present tense. A best fit approach sees this in level 2. 55
SECTION C: WRITING 56
QUESTION 7 SCRIPT 31: 57
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S31 mark 17 A Level 5 response that shows an assured control of punctuation, sentences and vocabulary. It shifts easily from an abstract opening into a well recounted anecdote. The sections about Maria illustrate the excellent control of expression that is a feature of this answer. The final paragraph may not live up to the earlier promise, and this may be weaker than S33, however it has enough quality to place it in level 5. 60
SCRIPT 32: 61
S32 mark 10 A response that scores half the total number of marks and is in level 3 because it is accurate, paragraphed and has some clear elements of control of person and tense. However, it appears unfinished and therefore lacks an overall structure. 62
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S33 mark 33 An absolutely outstanding answer that has range, control, genuine sophistication and a wide ranging vocabulary that includes a fluency in French expressions as well. What this answer achieves in exam conditions and in the time available is truly impressive. Reading the opening and the final paragraphs illustrates the subtle control of textual cohesion that is so well controlled. This answer is an example of writing at its very best and it must be stressed that it is possible to get very high marks, such as in S31 without being as good as this. 66
SCRIPT 34: 67
S34 mark 7 A level 2 answer that shows some early control but is not able to sustain it, ending the first paragraph with confusing ambiguity and a lack of clarity. There is some structure and some use of rhetorical questions but the piece is incomplete and does not sustain interest. 68
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S35 mark 18 A deceptively strong response that achieves a level 5 mark. Communication is subtle and sharply focused, accurate and varied throughout. The textual cohesion can be seen in the return to the first paragraph s focus upon old fashioned respect having a relevance in our modern world. This answer is also able to create some humour through the parenthetical insertion in the final paragraph. 72