CHAPTER ONE Mud s Two Sides Have the students read the chapters aloud, with different students volunteering to read character parts. Pause to check for understanding and to comment on elements that enhance appreciation. Once upon a time not so long ago in a busy, blue sea not far from Grammar Island... 7
...was Sentence Island, a blue island filled with ideas. High in the wind, a gray bird could just discern the shape of the island, shimmering in the ocean light. 8
The shape of the island from the air will prove to be the shape of the sentence itself. The images are designed to enhance the structural concepts. 9
In the ocean, schools of blue fish swam under the waves that splashed on the beach. Shells filled the sand like chocolate chips.
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Of all the fish in the school, one was different. His name was Mud. The others swam around him. Are you a mudfish? they asked. No, said Mud. Are you a muddy fish? they asked. No, said Mud. My name is Mud. 12
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Mud was different; he didn t care who knew it, so no one bothered him. In fact, Mud was different from the other fish in two ways. (Yes, he could talk, but all fish can talk.) First, Mud could walk on land. Second, Mud was obsessed; ideas rose from his head like bubbles. 14
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Mud was obsessed. He could not stop thinking about it. About what? Oh, the sentence. Mud had overheard a learned fish saying wonderful things about the sentence, and he just had to find a sentence, to see one for himself, to see a real one, to learn how to write one. It was Mud s mission. 16
Mud knew where to look: on that island, there: Sentence Island. 17
Mud swam to the blue island and rose through the splashing waves. Mud was all wet. He saw blue trees and blue ferns. I have to find a sentence, thought Mud. 18
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From the beginning, the serious problem of incomplete thought arises, and it will come full circle in Chapter Five. Pause here to ask why Mud doesn t understand. We will realize later that the tree is only saying predicates. Mud hurried. He went to the first tree. My name is Mud, said Mud. Can you tell me a sentence? Rolled over there, it moaned. Dug a hole and jumped. Huh? thought Mud. The tree groaned in the surfy wind, and Mud went to his left. 20
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Suddenly, a flock of ostriches raced by. Tell me a sentence! Mud called. A squirrel!...some seagulls!...that pine tree! they cried. Huh? thought Mud. 22
Here is another introduction to the problem of incomplete thought. In this case, the ostriches are only saying subjects with no predicates. Mud doesn t understand that yet, and to raise student curiosity, we can ask what is wrong with the ostriches words. Somehow, Mud knew those weren t sentences either. A seagull? he wondered. What about it? 23
Mud put his chin on his fin and looked out over a blue bay, where a loon was swimming toward him. It had been eavesdropping. Psst! You! It...is two! whispered the loon. Huh? thought Mud, perplexed. The sentence! cried the loon. It...is made of two sides, like this, and then the loon called, True loons...croon soon! Mud noticed that the loon paused strangely in the middle of his statements. 24
Cow Loon has a curious habit of pausing in each sentence; the pause emphasizes the dividing line between the subject side and the predicate side of the sentence. We want to instill a deep sense of how sentences get power from this simplicity. 25
Hi, said Mud. My name is Mud. My name...is Cow, said the loon, Cow Loon. The loon waddled up onto the beach and, using his beak, drew in the sand. First, he drew a straight, vertical line: Cow Loon s name is a play on the name Kowloon, a peninsula and urban area in Hong Kong. The word means Nine Dragons. In 1997 Kowloon and all of Hong Kong were transferred from British rule to the People s Republic of China. 26
Look, said the loon, a sentence...is an idea. It...is something about something. Two sides, see? And he wrote in the sand with his beak: Loons croon. 27
We want one student reading Mud s part aloud, and another student reading Cow Loon s part aloud. If the kids laugh at the scenes, it shows understanding and reinforces their motivation, so we want to encourage the fun. Mud pondered this idea... two sides something about something Loons croon Then he saw the two sides! This sentence, Loons croon, is about loons! What about them? They croon! Croon is about loons! 28
Do another one, said Mud, thinking that maybe this wasn t so loony after all. The loon looked at Mud and said, I...will. Go ahead, said Mud. I...will, said the loon. No, said Mud, make a sentence. I...will, said the loon. Do it! said Mud, getting annoyed. I...will, said the loon. Make a sentence! pleaded Mud. I...will, said the loon. 29
This was too much, but just as Mud was about to jump out of his scales, the loon laughed and said, Mud, I...will is a sentence! Mud s inner light began to glow... 30
Cow Loon could see that Mud was perplexed. Sentences...are made of words, Mud, he said. Do you...know how many kinds of words there are? Of course I no, Mud admitted. Two main kinds, the loon said, and six others. Like this, and he drew in the sand again. They...are called the eight parts of speech! 31
When we...write a sentence, the loon explained, the words...make a predicate about a subject. The subject...is what the sentence is about, and the predicate...is about it. subject I pronoun predicate will. verb 32
The subject of a sentence... is always a noun or pronoun, and a verb...is always the main word of the predicate. It is best if students have studied grammar prior to their work with this writing book. Grammar Island provides the necessary introduction. This book focuses on writing and does not attempt to teach all of the grammar. 33