FORMATIVE MINI ASSESSMENTS First Grading Period 2010-11 October 18-21 STUDENT NAME DATE PERIOD Revising & Editing Grade 4 Read each question and choose the best answer. Be sure to mark all of your answers. Shawn wrote this story after a trip to his grandparents house. He wants you to help him correct and improve it. Read Shawn s story and think about the changes you would make in it. Then answer the questions that follow. Grandma s House (1) I and my brother went to Grandma s house last weekend. (2) That s not unusual because we go there a lot. (3) What was unnusual was that my cousins from Colorado were there. (4) All seven of the grandchildren were together and was the first time. (5) Grandma insisted that we take a picture together. (6) Took a group picture in the backyard. (7) That s me holding the little girl in my lap. (8) My brother is holding the little boy. (9) I am the second older grandchild. (10) My brother is the oldest. (11) He is twelve years old. (12) The twins are the youngest. (13) They are one year old. (14) You would think that playing Copyright 2005 Region IV ESC 04 Revising & Editing FMA 2 Oct 10 Page 1
with my younger cousins wouldn t be fun, but it was. (15) We played games, hit golf balls ran races, and even played cards together. (16) Of course, we only played the easy card games with them. (17) My cousins left to go back to Colorado the day after this picture was taken. (18) They live in Durango, Colorado. (19) That is on the border with New Mexico. (20) I love the snow. (21) I hope it won t be another year before we see them again! 1 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1? A Change I and my brother to My brother and I B Change Grandma s to grandma s C Change weekend to weakend 3 What is the BEST way to rewrite the ideas in sentence 4? A All seven of the grandchildren were together first time for that. B That was the first time all seven of the grandchildren. C That was the first time all seven of the grandchildren were together. D All seven for the first time of the grandchildren were together. 2 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3? F Change unnusual to unusual G Change my to mine H Change Colorado to colorado 4 Which of the following is NOT a complete sentence? F Sentence 5 G Sentence 6 H Sentence 7 J Sentence 8 Copyright 2005 Region IV ESC 04 Revising & Editing FMA 2 Oct 10 Page 2
5 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 9? A Change am to were B Change older to oldest C Change the period to a question mark 8 Which sentence does NOT belong in this story? F Sentence 17 G Sentence 18 H Sentence 19 J Sentence 20 6 What is the BEST way to combine sentences 10 and 11? F My brother is older. He is twelve. G The twelve year old brother is the older. H The oldest is my brother and is twelve. J My twelve year old brother is the oldest. 7 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 15? A Change We to They B Add a comma after balls C Change played to playd Copyright 2005 Region IV ESC 04 Revising & Editing FMA 2 Oct 10 Page 3
Kendra is a fourth grader. She wrote this story to tell about something that happened in her neighborhood. Read Kendra s story, and think about changes and improvements she should make. Then answer the questions that follow. (1) One day while I was walking home from a friend s house, I herd a strange sound. (2) It sounded like it was coming from the bushes in Mrs. Yoon s yard. (3) I wanted to turn around and run because we had been telling scary stories at a slumber party last night. (4) I told myself to be brave and look under the bush. (5) I walked slowly toward the bush. (6) When I was only two feet away from the bush, the bush started moving, and the strange noise got louder and louder. (7) It sounded like a woman screaming. (8) I heard a woman scream once. (9) I slow reached toward the bush to push the lower limbs apart, so I could see what was making the horrible noise. (10) When I pushed the branches apart. (11) I saw a rainbow of colors. (12) When I looked closer, I saw that the bright colors were feathers. (13) The bird screeched and screamed when it saw me. (14) Then it spread out it s feathers in a large colorful fan. (15) It was a peacock. (16) Mrs. Yoon came running out of his house. (17) She was happy to see the peacock. (18) It was a pet that had gotten out of its cage in the backyard. (19) I told Mrs. Yoon that I had never seen no peacock before now. (20) She said that many people kept peacocks for pets in her native country. (21) Her country sounds very interesting. 9 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1? A Change walking to walked B Change friend s to friends C Change herd to heard 10 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4? F Change told to telled G Change brave to braver H Change look to looked Copyright 2005 Region IV ESC 04 Revising & Editing FMA 2 Oct 10 Page 4
11 What sentence does NOT belong in this story? A Sentence 5 B Sentence 6 C Sentence 7 D Sentence 8 14 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 14? F Change spread to spreads G Change it s to its H Change colorful to colorfull 12 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 9? F Change slow to slowly G Change so to because H Change see to sea 15 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 16? A Change Mrs. to Mrs B Change came to comed C Change his to her 13 Which of the following is NOT a complete sentence? A Sentence 9 B Sentence 10 C Sentence 11 D Sentence 12 16 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 19? F Change told to telled G Change had to has H Change no to a Copyright 2005 Region IV ESC 04 Revising & Editing FMA 2 Oct 10 Page 5