(Matthews 16) MLA Guidelines & Paper Editing ( Disasters 9) He believed, Flowers could grow
Paper Editing Your rough draft must be edited by two different students. You must also edit two different rough drafts to receive your editing grade. You must submit both edited rough draft copies (with editor s name) with your final paper. Follow this power point very carefully.
Editing
Introduction - 1 st sentence = HOOK Grabs readers attention If it s a quote it must be properly cited Does it make sense? Bridge connects hook to thesis Can be something from the books analyzed THESIS = LAST SENTENCE Must contain arguable point and something to do with the writer s novels of choice Must have at least one literary element in it Must not have author background in it
Body Paragraphs Everything in each body paragraph must support the THESIS of paper Must contain Topic sentence Two pieces of support (at least) Any information the reader needs to understand the support being used Solid explanations of how support proves topic of paragraph and thesis of overall paper Conclusion and transition sentence (can be one or two)
Body Paragraphs Topic Sentences Every body paragraph needs a sentence explaining what that paragraph is about. It must clearly support the argument made in the thesis. Write a T by each topic sentence. Topic Sentences can be a reverse hook or a following sentence but must be at the beginning of the paragraph You must read the entire paragraph to make sure there is nothing in the paragraph that does not fall under the topic sentence.
Body Paragraphs Quotes Is there at least one quote per body paragraph? Does the paragraph contain at least two pieces of support? Does everything in the paragraph support the topic of the paragraph?
Conclusion Restates but does not repeat thesis Summarizes main arguments Does not contain: Quotes New information
Transitions Each paragraph must flow into the next. As you edit you must ascertain whether or not the writer connects each paragraph to the next. Circle the word(s) that allow the sentences to flow from one to another If you cannot figure out how the sentences are connected you must write that on the paper
Transitions Example In "The Tell-Tale Heart," a (Last sentence in paragraph) careful reader can observe Poe's skillful manipulation of the senses. The sense of sight, the primary sense, is particularly susceptible to manipulation. (First sentence in next paragraph)
Paper Content Must have 6 different sources used (does not matter how- direct quotes, paraphrasings, or summaries Must contain literary criticism Paper length = full 3 pages but no more than 5 full pages
Parenthetical Citations & Quotations
Direct Quotes First of all make sure no direct quotes used in the paper are over 2 lines. If there are mark the quote(s) as too long. The writer must narrow down the evidence they are using. A three five page paper may not use block text
Embedding the Quote There are bad kids on the island. One of them is Roger. He drops a boulder on Piggy and kills him. "Roger, with a sense of delirious abandonment, leaned all his weight on the lever" (Golding 180). This caused Piggy's death.
Embedding the Quote The truest form of wickedness on the island is evident in Roger. He demonstrates his true depravity when, "with a sense of delirious abandonment, [he] leaned all his weight on the lever" (Golding 180). Well aware of Piggy's place beneath him, Roger willingly takes Piggy's life.
Ellipses Dillard says that the weasel "bites his prey at the neck... and he does not let go. INSTEAD OF: Dillard says that the weasel "bites his prey at the neck either splitting the jugular vein at the throat or crunching the brain at the base of the skull and he does not let go."
Ellipses He said, "I am here... (Smith 2). -Ellipsis because the quoted words are a complete sentence by themselves -Why four "periods" instead of three? Well, in this case, I am using an ellipsis (three periods) and a period for my own sentence (one period). The author called George a freak (Smith 2). -No ellipses because only quoted a phrase
Brackets Verb tense Dillard concludes her essay by saying that she "think it would be well, and proper, and obedient, and pure, to grasp your one necessity and not let it go, to dangle from it limp wherever it take you. CHANGE TO: Dillard concludes her essay by saying that she "think[s] it would be well, and proper, and obedient, and pure, to grasp your one necessity and not let it go, to dangle from it limp wherever it take[s] you."
Brackets - pronouns Use brackets when the original meaning of the message is unclear due to confusing pronouns. Dillard was "stunned into stillness as he was emerging from beneath an enormous shaggy wild rose bush four feet away. CHANGE TO- Dillard was "stunned into stillness as [the weasel] was emerging from beneath an enormous shaggy wild rose bush four feet away."
Parenthetical Citations anything else = PLAGIARISM If the ideas didn t come from your own brain then you MUST CITE IT! Example: (author s last name pg #) (Golding 117) You must cite = Direct Quotations, Paraphrased Notes, and Summaries.
Parenthetical Citations Usually you will cite author s last name because it is the first piece of info from the citation. However, there are different possibilities Two sources with the same author- cite the next piece of info (ie. Usually a title; must be punctuated the same as in the citation) No author- use whatever info comes first in the citation (usually a title; must be punctuated the same as in the citation) If you are citing a website with no page numbers you need a paragraph number (Smith par 2) or ( Julia Alvarez par 27)
There Are Two Ways To Make Parenthetical Citations 1.Put the author s name in the stem of your sentence, and the page number in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Example: Jones described his dog as a snarling beast that day (117).
2. Put both the author s name and the page number in parentheses at the end of the sentence. Example: The dog was a snarling beast that day (Jones 117).
Citation Punctuation If your sentence ends with a period, put the period after the parentheses. Example: beast (Jones 117). If your sentence ends with a question mark or an exclamation point, put it before the last quotation mark. Examples: beast? (Jones 117). beast! (Jones 117).
Direct Quote 1. Golding reveals how "Roger, with a sense of delirious abandonment, leaned all his weight on the lever (180). Well aware of Piggy's place beneath him, Roger willingly takes Piggy's life. or 2. The reader can see that Roger, with a sense of delirious abandonment, leaned all his weight on the lever (Golding 180). Well aware of Piggy's place beneath him, Roger willingly takes Piggy's life.
Paraphrased 1. Golding shows that Roger is wicked by making him happy and excited when he leaned on the lever with his entire weight (180). Well aware that Piggy is beneath him, Roger willingly takes Piggy's life. Or 2. The reader knows that Roger is wicked because he was happy and excited when he leaned on the lever with his entire weight (Golding 180). Well aware that Piggy is beneath him, Roger willingly takes Piggy's life.
Summary 1. Golding lists Ralph s rules: fire only on the mountain top, the sea rocks are bathrooms, and everyone must leave water in the coconut shells (53). Or 2. In chapter 3, Ralph lists his rules: fire only on the mountain top, the sea rocks are bathrooms, and everyone must leave water in the coconut shells (Golding 53).
Editing Embedding Quotes - Is the quote embedded into the writer s sentence? Underline the writer s words attached to the quote. If you can t it s not embedded. Is the quote correctly punctuated? You must look at the original quote on their outline to know. Ex. The narrator said, I have the conch.
Editing MLA Guidelines Do all of their quotes (including an opening hook) have page numbers correctly cited? Ex. He said, I have the conch (Golding 23). Summarizing and paraphrasing must also be cited. You must read their entire paper. If they use information from the book (NOT FROM THEIR OWN BRAINS) it must include a citation. Highlight any plagiarized text blue or green.
Sources
Total Sources Paper must have 6 different sources used Two sources must be novels Only once source (besides the novels) may be used outside of the approved databases; this source must be verified as credible All sources must actually be cited in paper not just listed on the works cited page
Literary Criticism
Lit Crit Addresses literary devices of the two novels Shows understanding of texts/topics Show awareness of author s purpose
Grammar & Mechanics
Mechanics- No grammatical, spelling, or punctuation errors anywhere in the paper No run-on sentences or sentence fragments All sentences make sense to reader not just in the writer s head when they wrote it at 3 in the morning. Sentences structures vary
MLA & Paper Formatting
Paper Formatting - Must be double-spaced Times New Roman 12 pt font Must have original title Heading must be in the header Heading must be double-spaced in upper lefthand corner (and not in the header): NAME Bush ENGLISH II PreAP/MYP Block Due Date
Works Cited Page & Citations
Works Cited Page You must turn in a Works Cited Page with your final research paper. Directions are in the packet with an example. Follow the directions carefully.
Citations For further questions concerning MLA formatting: The Purdue Online Writing Lab (OWL) http://owl.english.purdue.edu/