Monday, October 29 [8:00 9:15 / 9:30 10:45] today homework due Monday, November 5 Essay 3 rough draft due peer review revising & editing info. Essay 3 due / bring [I will provide folder] final draft & works cited page printouts of research article(s) tutoring receipt or my comments** rough draft(s) peer review comments outline rough works cited page research notes proposal Read Choosing an Internet-Blocked Daily Routine by Stuart McMillen * This class cancelled this Wednesday. * advice hours: M 11-12 / W 2-3 / TTh 11-2 I. Take roll. II. Essay 3 RD Due [8:00 8:15 / 9:30 9:45] A. Collect. B. Check. C. Sort by topic. D. Write two new titles for your essay: Raise Your Kids Right: Adichie s Convincing Call to Action Same Love Macklemore s Timeless Call for Human Rights E. Try to expand your conclusion: To what extent can music, art, popular culture, or online videos cause or influence social change? F. Write your 4 questions / concerns on the green PR form. 1
III. Essay 3 Peer Review [8:15 9:00 / 9:45 10:30] A. Instructions 1. Find your partner. 2. Discuss your questions & concerns. 3. Exchange papers. Read essay very carefully. 4. Write comments on the draft. 5. Complete the green peer-review form. 6. Review the draft one more time only focusing on MLA format, ICE quotes, etc. 7. Discuss your suggestions & comments with your partner. B. Complete the writer s section of the green peer-review form now (3 or 4 to-do items). IV. Revising & Editing Overview Continue these steps on your own between now and next Monday. See a tutor or me sometime this week. 2
Essay 3: Revising & Editing Workshop Basics A. Assignment sheet Check off completed steps now. PRINT articles & write titles of articles on copies. Checklist of what to turn in. I will provide a folder. MLA format B. Research-paper rubric / previous essays. Compare your draft to the categories now. What are your essay s strengths and weaknesses? Engage Your Reader A. Check your title now. It needs to be catchy & informative. Include the text title or author s / creator s name. Examples: Raise Your Kids Right: Adichie s Convincing Call to Action Same Love Macklemore s Timeless Call for Human Rights B. The thesis statement What is the text s argument? How and why is it effective, persuasive? needs to preview all your paragraphs should be able to stand alone highlight it now C. Relate your title / hook / thesis / closing use a repeated word in each one 3
Ice, Ice, Baby A. supporting paragraphs 1. include quotation / evidence from the text in every support 2. include quotation from research in every support 3. ICE every quotation (or example) INTRODUCE CITE (Smith 52). EXPLAIN 4. highlight every single quote (or example) now why? one color for the text one color for research do not start or end a paragraph with a quote B. transitions help the reader see the structure of your essay highlight all of your transitions now WHY? Analyzing an Argument Requires Organization A. Think about ways to re-arrange the paragraphs. Practice: cut and paste using the computer write main ideas on index cards or post-its then shuffle OR actually cut up the essay - cut the pages - try different ways to re-arrange them - use tape to assemble them again B. If you re-arrange the paragraphs, revise the thesis and the transitions. 4
Every Ending Is a Beginning A. Conclusion 1. A detailed, thoughtful conclusion can save the paper. 2. Summarize & connect points (at least one sentence per support paragraph). 3. Connect this essay to larger social concerns. 4. To what extent can music, art, popular culture, or online videos cause or influence social change? 5. Write a memorable closing provide a Oh yeah! moment for reader. B. Works cited page check the sample again. double spaced hanging indent alphabetical by last name C. Proofreading techniques read out loud read on paper read in reverse isolate every sentence stand, walk, & read - practice this now listen to your own words use Google translate D. Final revising / editing checklist now: 5
week Monday Wednesday 11 Oct. 29 rough draft of Essay 3 due peer review Oct. 31 Essay 3 workshop bring rough draft revising & editing MLA format review 2 = last day to drop with a W 12 5 Essay 3 due Choosing an Internet-Blocked Daily Routine by Stuart McMillen Essay 4 introduced 7 Is Google Making Us Stupid?" by Nicholas Carr The Social Media Echo-Chamber Is Real by Roheeni Saxena 13 12 Veterans Day no classes college closed 14 digital-diet diary for Essay 4 due proposal for Essay 4 due finding & evaluating sources 14 19 research notes for Essay 4 due English Composition II: Persuasion Purdue OWL: Logical Fallacies evidence & appeals / avoiding fallacies outlining Essay 4 21 outline for Essay 4 due rough works cited for Essay 4 due English Composition II: Audience evidence & appeals / audience / readers writing Essay 4 15 26 rough draft of Essay 4 due peer review 28 Essay 4 workshop bring rough draft revising & editing 30 = UC / CSU applications due 16 Dec. 3 Essay 4 due Essay 4 debates introduced prep for debates Dec. 5 prep for debates Essay 4 debates 17 Dec. 10 Essay 4 debates Final Exam introduced Dec. 12 perfect attendance awards review for Final Exam course evaluations 18 Dec. 17 Section 01282 (MW 8 a.m. class) Final Exam Monday, December 17 8:45 11:15 a.m. Dec. 19 Section 01284 (MW 9:30 a.m. class) Final Exam Wednesday, December 19 8:45 11:15 a.m. finals week advice hours Mon., Dec. 17 / Tue., Dec. 18 / Wed., Dec. 19 / Thurs., Dec. 20 11:30 a.m. 12:30 p.m. 6