Student Writing Intensive C Due Week 3

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1 Student Writing Intensive C Due Week 3 Rename this file with your name: FirstLastName_3_SWI.doc. Do not remove any instructions. Assignment Due Before next class, submit this renamed document on Engrade. It should include the assignment instructions, checklist, 3 KWOs, and 2 paragraphs. Every week: I return papers on Engrade in a message. If your parents have an Engrade account, I will send your papers back to them as well as to you. Required (see checklist): Read over my comments on returned papers, ideally with a parent. Please message me if you have questions about my comments. o Since work is cumulative, master concepts as we go; they can quickly snowball. o Keep a list of errors you frequently make. Use that as an added checklist to help you proofread. On returned papers, to see what the bubble notes go with, follow the line from them to an arrow, which points to where that correction needs to be made. o The arrow is NOT a comma! o The delete mark is just a line drawn through something. The bubble note explains why. Check Engrade frequently for messages to help with questions as they arise or to give tips we did not have time to cover in class. Engrade messages are required class content. Day 1 No DVD this week. Keep your binder organized and handouts available during class. Chanticleer 3.1 Print the symbols and abbreviations list from Engrade. Read through it, and work to include as many legal symbols and abbreviations as you can into your KWOs. Today, write two KWOs with no more than 3 key words per note: Write a KWO on Color for Life (p. 17 binder, bottom paragraph). Write a KWO on Doctors (p. 13 binder). Day 2 Chanticleer 3.2 Write the paragraph about cephalopods from your Color for Life KWO. Follow proper formatting. Include at least one who or which clause in the paragraph and underline just one who or which. Remember to check if it needs commas see tip beneath checklist. Day 3 Chanticleer 3.3 Write a KWO on Pericles (article posted on Engrade). Then write a paragraph from your KWO following instructions from Day 2. Remember to underline one who or which. No credit if not underlined! 1 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

2 Day 4 Chanticleer 3.4 Bring to class your edited version. Proofread both paragraphs for punctuation, grammar, spelling, and no contractions. Proofread by reading your paragraphs aloud. Do use a spell check but turn off your grammar check. It will teach grammar confusion! Have you checked for the errors you made in last week s work? Have you heeded the tips on the checklist and in the grammar specials beneath it? After you proofread your own work, ask your beloved in-house editor to help you check. Remember to ask your parent for initials where indicated on the checklist. Day 5 Read the story of the miller, his son, and their donkey p.23 in your binder. Bring it to class, along with Fix It and class notes. Before class, submit this renamed file on Engrade. It should have in it 3 KWOs and 2 paragraphs on the pages following the checklist. Bring to class a list of symbols or abbreviations you think worked well in your KWOs this week. Also bring your edited Fix It passages and class notes. Download all applicable files for Week Late Paper Policy for IEW Online Level C 1. Papers are due before class starts on the due date. 2. Only with a written exception from a parent prior to the due date and only for extenuating circumstances (illness, family emergency, vacation), an assignment may be turned in up to two days after the due date, not counting Sundays. 3. Unexcused papers not turned in on time will lose ten points daily. If they are later than two days after the due date, they receive an M (missing), which factors into your grade as a zero. 2 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

3 Due Week 3 Grade for this assignment: 92.5 /100 Task Late Rename this document as First Last Name_3_SWI.doc 5 Chanticleer Parent check: _LMB * 10 KWOs (Limit 3 KEY words per note. USE ++ legal symbols & abbreviations.) Define words 18 4 beneath the Pericles KWO. Paragraphs 14 Formatting for each paragraph following Paper Format rules (Times New Roman 12 point; line spacing; 4-line heading; title centered; paragraph left aligned; indent ½ inch) 1 who-which clause correctly used & underlined in both paragraphs (2 total). Use commas if 10 1 nonessential, no commas if essential. Tip: If you aren t sure, send me the sentence! Grammar**; spelling; no contractions. Use your spell check but not grammar check Proofread by reading paragraphs aloud, slowly 8 In-house editor: help with proofreading & sign checklist where indicated 8 Read over comments on last paper, ideally with a parent (required weekly). Apply what you missed by keeping a list of things to check. Parent check: _LMB * 8 * Parent check means a parent has checked that the work is completely done (no need to grade it) and that students have read the answers in the Fix It! Teacher s Manual. If students have done partial work, please type in the points they deserve. **Grammar Specials Essential and nonessential who-which clauses. Ask: If I remove the clause, will it affect the meaning of the rest of the sentence? If not, it is nonessential and takes commas before the who or which and after the clause. Numbers: spell out those you can write in 1 to 2 words except for dates No contractions New This Week No commas with mid-sentence prep phrases Use spell check, not grammar check 3 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

4 Key Word Outline Cephalopods (p. 17 binder, bottom article, titled Color for Life ) 1. C. Skin, Colorful. 2. Layers, Cells, Patterns. 3. Cells (Chromophores), Skin. 4. ea. Cell, Sac, Color. 5. Muscles, Contract, Sac > 6. Relax, Sac <, Color < 7. Cells,, Stripes. 8. Color, Immediately. 9. Help, Camouflage. 10. Cells, C, Beauty, Protection. Commented [MH1]: Spelling make sure you copy odd words correctly from source Limit: No more than 3 words per note. Excellent use of legal symbols & abbreviations. 4 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

5 Key Word Outline Doctors (p. 13 binder) 1. EU 19 th c. Doctors, 2 Classes. 2. Learned Ph. Cane, Coat. 3. Dr. Knew, Latin, Greek 4. Learning, talk > Practice<. 5. Time, Anatomy, Bodies. 6. Ph. Squeamish, Body. 7. Dr. Touch Wounds, Operations. 8. Tasks, Class, Barber SG. 9. Craftsmen, Heal, Body. 10. SG. > Training, Better Treatments. 11. Unfortunately, Ph. s Listen, Surgeons 12. Many Yrs. Classes Merged 1. Commented [MH2]: Drs Commented [MH3]: Not a legal abbreviation for physician Commented [MH4]: Lat. Grk. Commented [MH5]: Barber-surgeon is one word Commented [MH6]: ++ Limit: No more than 3 words per note. Excellent use of legal symbols & abbreviations. Remember that you may not use first letter (or two) of word as abbreviation 5 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

6 Key Word Outline Pericles (posted on Engrade) 1. Athenian s Admired P. Family 2. P s Objective, Athens Prosperous. 3. Bribes, Selfish Profit. 4. Athenian s Trusted, Confidence P. 5. P. Athenians, Reckless Cautious. 6. P s Family, Happy. 7. Estate, P. Too Stingy. 8. Meticulously, Daily Spending s. 9. Trust Anyone, P. $. 10. Neglected TCH. (Anaxagoras), Starving. 11. P. Finally Die Counselor. 12. Anaxagoras Lamp, Light. Commented [MH7]: use symbol Commented [MH8]: use symbol Commented [MH9]: ++ stingy OR parsimonious Limit: No more than 3 words per note. Excellent use of legal symbols & abbreviations. Type below definitions of the two words from the article: Parsimonious: Unwilling to spend money. Meticulously: Showing great attention to detail. 6 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

7 Write the paragraph on cephalopods. Remember not to hit enter at the end of lines in a paragraph. Luke Brandl Marci Harris Student Writing Intensive-C Color for Life Cephalopod s skin can be very colorful. The layers of cells can change color and create patterns. The color cells, or Chromophores, can be found under the skin. Each cell has a sac which contains color. When the muscles around the sac contract, the sac opens wider, exposing more color. The sac closes when the muscles relax. These cells can even create patterns like stripes and do so immediately. They can also help with camouflage. As is seen, Chromophores Commented [MH10]: In the singular, you need an article before this A cephalopod s skin Commented [MH11]: Lowercase, not capital Spelling Commented [MH12]: Great essential w/w Commented [MH13]: Doing what to the color? (it s in your KWO) Commented [MH14]: Word choice are used for both beauty and protection. This is a good example of why it is so important to make sure that information is copied into your KWO accurately. 7 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.

8 Write the paragraph on Pericles (keep it as one paragraph). Luke Brandl Marci Harris Student Writing Intensive-C Pericles The ancient Athenians admired the orator and politician Pericles, but his family resented his rule. His objective was to make Athens rich and powerful. He never took bribes for selfish profit which made the Athenians trust and have confidence in him. Pericles s family was not pleased with him. Although he had inherited a large estate, Pericles was too stingy and carefully counted all the daily expenses. He would not trust anyone with the money, including his sons. Pericles even neglected his old teacher, Anaxagoras, until he was starving. Pericles had a change Commented [MH15]: Commas set off nonessential who-which clauses Commented [MH16]: No comma: mid-sentence prep phrase Grammar special! of heart, ran to his bedside, and begged him not to die and deprive him of such a valued counselor. Anaxagoras replied saying that even those who use a lamp put oil in it so it will give light. Great job relaying the information in your Pericles Remember the rule about legal abbreviations! 8 Institute for Excellence in Writing, L.L.C. All rights reserved. Duplication or distribution prohibited.