ENGLISH 028. Week 3, Day 2. Editing an In-Class Essay

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1 ENGLISH 028 Week 3, Day 2 Editing an In-Class Essay

2 In-Class Debate! Strong paragraphs 2 chunk paragraphs Paragraph revision WHAT ARE WE DOING TODAY?

3 Barney by Will Stanton 1) Why is Tayloe fired? How does the protagonist rationalize it? 2) What really happened to Tayloe? Explain your reasoning. 3) Why did the spelling get so bad by the end of the story? 4) What is the theme of Barney? IN-CLASS DEBATE

The sublime: A feeling where a piece The sublime: of writinggenerally or

but these things are Answer by Frederic Brown terrifying, displeasing, and scaryà a

sensation 2) This story afterwards was first written in 1964.

3) To what extent does this story illustrate the sublime?

4 The sublime: A feeling where a piece The sublime: of writinggenerally or naturenatural things- our completely overwhelms brains are more powerful, you. but these things are Answer by Frederic Brown terrifying, displeasing, and scaryà a positive 1) Whatcreates is the theme of the story? sensation 2) This story afterwards was first written in How do you think that affects it? 3) To what extent does this story illustrate the sublime? The sublime: Terror [is] the ruling priniciple of the sublime. It is a violent, emotional reaction. "The passion caused by the great and sublime in nature... is Astonishment; and astonishment is that state of the soul, in which all its motions are suspended, with some degree of horror. In this case the mind is so entirely filled with its object, that it cannot entertain any other (Burke 58). IN-CLASS DEBATE

5 What do you know that you need in a paragraph? What things make paragraphs stronger? What is required for this essay? STRONG PARAGRAPHS

6 Strong paragraphs: Have 1 core idea Have a topic sentence Develop enough Have logical bridges Include evidence Have analysis THE RESULTS ARE IN

7 What do you think it is? What could it be?! Read the sample paragraph Try to identify the different parts THE 2 CHUNK PARAGRAPH

8 In George Orwell s Animal Farm, Boxer represents the working class of Russia. First, Boxer works harder than all of the other animals, as Orwell writes, From morning to night he was pushing and pulling, always at the spot where work was hardest (40). Boxer believes in Animalism and is motivated to work harder for this cause than even for Farmer Jones. Also, Boxer s character reveals that Orwell believed the common workers of Russia were also working harder than ever for little reward. Secondly, Boxer is easily brainwashed by Napoleon and his propaganda, insisting If Comrade Napoleon says it, it must be right (Orwell 91). Because Boxer is less intelligent than other animals, Napoleon easily brainwashes Boxer into submission even when Napoleon commits terrible injustices. Consequently, Orwell suggests that the lower class Russian workers were also easily manipulated by Joseph Stalin. In conclusion, Boxer s character, through his relentless work and gullibility, paints a picture of the much abused, hardworking, and honest Russian working class. BREAK IT DOWN!

9 In George Orwell s Animal Farm, Boxer represents the working class of Russia. First, Boxer works harder than all of the other animals, as Orwell writes, From morning to night he was pushing and pulling, always at the spot where work was hardest (40). Boxer believes in Animalism and is motivated to work harder for this cause than even for Farmer Jones. Also, Boxer s character reveals that Orwell believed the common workers of Russia were also working harder than ever for little reward. Secondly, Boxer is easily brainwashed by Napoleon and his propaganda, insisting If Comrade Napoleon says it, it must be right (Orwell 91). Because Boxer is less intelligent than other animals, Napoleon easily brainwashes Boxer into submission even when Napoleon commits terrible injustices. Consequently, Orwell suggests that the lower class Russian workers were also easily manipulated by Joseph Stalin. In conclusion, Boxer s character, through his relentless work and gullibility, paints a picture of the much abused, hardworking, and honest Russian working class. BREAK IT DOWN!

concrete detail (quote, fact, statistic, or story) commentary sentences concrete detail (quote, fact, statistic, or story) commentary sentences concluding sentence

10 Q: What is a 2 chunk paragraph? A: A 2 chunk paragraph is a formula for strong paragraphs. The formula is: topic sentence that introduces the idea or theme of the paragraph. concrete detail (quote, fact, statistic, or story) commentary sentences concrete detail (quote, fact, statistic, or story) commentary sentences concluding sentence that wraps up the ideas discussed in the paragraph and transitions to the next paragraph. 2 CHUNK PARAGRAPHS Q: What is a chunk? A: A chunk is 1 concrete detail and 2 sentences of commentary. The detail can be a fact or quote. The commentary explains why the detail is important and how it ties in to your essay s overall idea.

11 Check out this example paragraph BLACK BART BARTHOLOMEW What do you notice about it?

12 Look out for: Introductory sentences Evidence Analysis Transitions Concluding sentences EDIT EACH OTHERS PARAGRAPHS

13 Edit Essay #1à Due on Monday 1 blank rubric (available on website) Original, handwritten in-class essay (with my mark) Revised, typed, final in-class essay submission HOMEWORK

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