JOHNNY: WRITTEN NARRATIVE RETELL

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4 Genre: achieving different purposes level of scaffolding schematic structure organises the text: conjunctions: First, Next, Finally, In addition dependent clauses: When I was four phrases of time, place, manner: Yesterday, At church, With a knife topic words: Snakes action verbs (in procedures): Slice, Boil existential subject to introduce new information: There layout: subheadings, diagrams, pictures independently written following reading and discussion of story and activities related to the task and genre title, simple orientation, sequence of events including complication and resolution, evaluation and reorientation time, place, manner: One Sunny (sunny) day, then (Then), the (The) next day 5 builds cohesion: reference items: my, it, him, this, there, the vocabulary patterns - synonyms / antonyms - words that go together: change tyre - classification: motor vehicles - sedans, hatchbacks, utilities - composition (whole-part): motor vehicles - wheels, tyres, engine, seat belt conjunctions to join sentences: Next, So, However, Therefore reference: his (he), I, him, you, her, me (my), his, the, my, hiy (he) vocabulary patterns - composition: garden, plants, prikols (prickles) conjunctions: then (Then) joins clauses to expand information: linking conjunctions: and, or, so, and then binding conjunctions: because, if, as, when, so / so that relative clauses: Perth, which is the capital,... linking: and binding: if Page 4

5 Field: expressing ideas and experiences noun groups: numbers, describers, classifiers, qualifiers: David, television, a book, a little boy, a mountain bike, the man in the shop, the three pictures on the wall, the children who live in the city comparatives: funnier, slower, more beautiful, best One sunny day, the baby Blosem, her baby Blosem, the tow (two) girls, one boy, a kapet of flawers (a carpet of flowers), a dog laik a wov (like a wolf), a salt water kroodayol (crocodile), the one gerl (girl), big tribal (trouble), Mr Wintergarden garden, Mr Wintergarten fenc (fence), my sliper (slipper) 5 / 6 nominalisations: likelihood, growth, development, beauty, risk, government, ability verbs: action: subtract, divide, peered, scanned mental (sensing): knew, think, believe saying: said, laughed, shouted relational: are, became, has verbal groups: wants to play, tried pushing phrasal verbs: look it up, put up with circumstances and clauses: when: on Sunday, when we arrived where: at the sign how: carefully, with a fine brush, like a leopard with whom / what: with my friend, with my dog why: due to the rain, because it is late technical vocabulary: consume, diet direct and reported speech: direct: She said, I am going home. reported: She said she was going home. action: boy (buy), went, wocht (watched), playeb (played), put, livs (lives), rayds (rides), lost, siy (see), haend (happened), kik (kick), play, giv (give), goy (go), push (pushed), nok (knocked), ran, cacht (caught), calm (came), throwing, kach (catch), livt (lived) mental (sensing): felterd (felt at), know saying: sed (said) relational: was, has, wos (was), ay (are), is verbal groups: went to tel (tell), wonst (wants) to play, went to play phrasal verbs: luk (look) for, baunct (bounced) around when: One sunny day, at naiat (night), the next day, ever after where: over Mr Garten s back garden, aucid (outside), away, in the garden, necst (next) door, on his krokadayal (crocodile), theruy the prikols (through the prickles), strat (straight) to Mr Wintergarden garden, to Mr Wintergarden, to the gait (gate), incayd (inside), back with whom / what: with her baby Blosem, with the bol (ball), with the tow gerls nd one boy (two girls and one boy), with my (me), wither (with her) salt water kroodayal (crocodile), kukise (cookies), sliper (slipper), prickles direct: examples - Rose sed kan I play no sed the one boy (Rose said Can I play? No, said the one boy); diyu no huys liv necst door no. ( Do you know who lives next door now?); No. Rose sed necst door lives Mr Wintergarden thay sedy huy has a dog laik a wov and a salt water kroodayal ( No, Rose said, Next door lives Mr Wintergarden. They said he has a dog like a wolf and a salt water crocodile.) Page 5

6 Tenor: interacting with others speech functions: statements, questions, offers, commands subjectivity / objectivity: subjective: I believe objective: It is possible series of statements using mostly compound sentences, uses questions in direct speech, written with limited accuracy 4 / 5 modality: certainty: reckon, think, perhaps, will, has to be obligation: could, should, must certainty: kan (can), will interpersonal meaning: feelings, attitudes: It s beautiful, I like you, very, excellent, best, naughty, rude, well-behaved, just, only, luckily idioms, colloquialisms, humour names to refer to people feelings, attitudes: veriy (very) sad, plise (please), sked (scared) idioms, humour: haerli (happily) ever after names: Blosem (Blossom), Mr Wintergarten appropriateness of tenor vocabulary choices paint a picture for the reader and indicate some of the characters feelings and attitudes, more emotive language could have been used Page 6

7 Mode: creating spoken and written texts tenses: primary: past, present, future secondary: other tenses eg was sleeping, wanted to go, have gone passive voice: active: The winds flamed the fire. passive: The fire was flamed by the wind. primary - past: wos (was), sed (said), ocht (watched), playeb (played), went, put, sedy (said), lost, hapend (happened), ran, baunct (bounced), cacht (caught), cairn (came), livt (lived) - future: will give - present: livs (lives), has, rayds (rides), ay (are), is, put, go, look for - present instead of past: boy (buy ), kik (kicked), push (pushed), nok (knocked) secondary - accurate: went to tell, went to play, have lost, have playeb (have played), wonst to play (wants to play), kan siyet (can see it), wol giv (will give), can goy (can go), kan luk for (can look for) - inaccurate: kan throwing (can throw) subject-verb agreement errors: ther was two gerls (there were two girls) despite the errors in spelling, tense beyond the most simple has been formed with some accuracy shows awareness of irregular past tense and secondary tenses 4 / 5 foregrounding: abstract elements: The habitat of the snakes conjunctions dependent clauses phrases of time, place, manner non-human elements: The lathe human elements: specific We, general People action verbs: Draw existential subject to introduce new information: There interpersonal elements: Dear, Thankyou, Well time, place, manner: One sunny day, the next day, then human: Rose appropriateness of foregrounding coherence: introduction, topic sentences and the links between them foregrounding of time and human element appropriate for a retell of a narrative the introduction provides a simple orientation for the remainder of the narrative print conventions: handwriting: letter formation, spacing, direction spelling: link to pronunciation and visual patterns punctuation: capitals, fullstops, question marks, commas, speech marks, apostrophes, links to intonation abbreviations: cm, 2nd handwriting: mostly legible spelling: spells some common words accurately and uses letter / sound knowledge to support spelling of unfamiliar words: krokadayal (crocodile) punctuation: capital letters for names, no fullstops, no speech marks and commas for direct speech, no apostrophes for the possessive: Mr Wintergarten garden multimedia / multimodal: links between gestures, visual images, physical objects, sound, light, layout, tables, spoken and written text Page 7