Elaboration Module Series of Lessons

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1 Elaboration Module Series of Lessons Defining Elaboration Asking Questions that Lead to Elaboration Recognizing Elaboration Show, Don't Tell Specific, Concrete Details versus General Language Elaboration within Sentences Layering -- Elaboration Using Multiple Sentences Criteria for Assessment

2 ELABORATION WITHIN SENTENCES

3 Elaboration within a Sentence Sentences can be expanded by adding elaboration. Sentences can be combined to provide elaboration. TELL ME MORE... APPOSITIVES, PHRASES, AND CLAUSES.

4 Appositives Add information to a single sentence.

5 Appositives An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that follows another noun or pronoun that renames it or adds information. An appositive is usually set apart from the sentence by commas. Joel made the goal. Joel, the star of the team, made the goal. Sentence with an appositive.

6 Appositives answer the reader s questions. Mom---Natalya is coming over tonight. Who is Natalya? Natalya, the girl who sits beside me in band, is coming over tonight.

7 Add an appositive to a sentence. WHO? Ms. Ortega,, is my teacher. Ms. Ortega, English teacher in room 7, is my teacher. Crystal Lake,, WHERE? is my home. Crystal Lake, a lovely town off Interstate 90, is my home.

8 Elaborate by adding appositives. Try adding an appositive with a partner. My school,, is the best. That lunch,,was the worst. Mrs. Dennis,, helped me find a site on the Internet. My car,, is a piece of junk.

9 Some Samples My school, the largest school in our town, is the best. That lunch, liver, onions, and ketchup, was the worst. Mrs. Dennis, our new librarian, helped me find a site on the Internet. My car, an ancient jalopy inherited from my brother, is a piece of junk.

10 Combine sentences to form an appositive. We can combine the two following sentences into one power-packed sentence and delete unnecessary words. John plays varsity basketball for the Springfield Hurricanes basketball team. He is a senior and the point guard for his team. John, the senior point guard, plays basketball for the Springfield Hurricanes.

11 More Practice Combining Sentences to Form Appositives Look at the two sentences. Choose one of the sentences to be the base sentence and using the important information from the other sentence, write an appositive. Trevor owns and operates Screaming T- Shirts. Trevor owns his own business. Trevor, the owner, operates the business Screaming T-Shirts.

12 Elaborate by combining sentences. More practice Emily bought a present for her best friend at Macy s. Emily bought a silver ring for her best friend. Alex ran around the track 25 times that morning. Alex is a marathon runner from Yacoco High School.

13 Prepositional Phrases A prepositional phrase adds information and elaboration by answering questions a reader may have. Prepositional phrases are often used to answer questions about position, place, location, or time. (examples of prepositions - by, of, for, on, in, under, with, through, beside, before, after, during )

14 Phrases add elaboration. Example Susie, a senior at Springfield High, runs the concession stand. When does Susie run the concession stand? Why does she run it? Susie, a senior at Springfield High, runs the concession stand for every basketball game.

15 Your Turn to Add Prepositional Phrases With your partner, add prepositional phrases to the following sentences to answer questions a reader may have. Luis got his driving license. Maryann earned an academic award. Nadia came in first place.

16 Clauses add elaboration. Definition A clause is a group of words that depends on a complete sentence and starts with an introductory word such as who, which, that, although, since, or because and has its own subject and verb.

17 Clauses add elaboration. Example Elaine had plenty of her own money. Elaine asked her friend Delia to pay for her movie ticket. Combined with a clause Although Elaine had plenty of her own money, she asked her friend Delia to pay for her movie ticket.

18 Another Example Example Maryann and Jocelyn were both late getting home. The party lasted longer than planned. Combined with a clause Because the party lasted longer than planned, Maryann and Jocelyn were both late getting home.

19 One More Example Example Gabriel had a flat tire on Snoqualmie Pass. He was rescued by a state patrolman. Combined with a clause Gabriel, who had a flat tire on Snoqualmie Pass, was rescued by a state patrolman. OR When Gabriel had a flat tire on Snoqualmie Pass, he was rescued by a state patrolman.

20 Your turn to elaborate with clauses. Combine the following pairs of sentences using clauses. Benjamin and Gerardo walked home after the football game. Celia offered Benjamin and Gerardo a ride home after the Friday night football game. Josh went to take his driving test. Josh failed his driving test two times.

21 Elaboration Module Series of Lessons Defining Elaboration Asking Questions that Lead to Elaboration Recognizing Elaboration Show, Don't Tell Specific, Concrete Details versus General Language Elaboration within Sentences Layering -- Elaboration Using Multiple Sentences Criteria for Assessment

22 LAYERING vs. LISTING Lesson 7

23 Layering Elaboration A thoughtful writer layers one sentence after another. Each new sentence adds to or develops the thought...like rings around a bull s-eye. Lesson 7

24 Layering seems like Each idea is carefully stacked on the next... like bricks in a wall...or rings on a tall tree. Lesson 7

25 Every sentence and detail fit with the rest of the topic...like a set of nesting dolls. Lesson 7

26 Listing vs. Layering Don t add boring, list-like sentences just to make the paragraph longer. REMEMBER length doesn t always mean quality elaboration. List-like example rather than layering - Having lots of choices is the reason why I eat at school. I love nachos. I like the pizza at school. Sometimes I order salad when I am feeling full. I have some favorite vegetables. See - Choices-listing.doc, Choices-layering.doc Lesson 7

27 Layering sounds like TOPIC Having lots of food choices is the reason why I like my school s lunchroom. I can select my favorite foods for lunch everyday. I sometimes pick cheesy nachos with the melted cheese sauce smothered over the hot crispy chips. If I don t want anything that greasy, like nachos or pizza, I can choose a made-for-me salad. This means I get to choose what goes on it and my favorite veggies, including olives, peppers, and tomatoes. The best thing is I can pick a food that fits my attitude that day. Lesson 7

28 TOPIC Another layering example Skiing down a Black Diamond run gives a rush like no other. What appears like a peaceful sport is really a contrast to the 50 mph feel of the wind in your face, waist-high moguls to weave in and out of while your thighs scream, Stop! With a wind chill of minus 10, you still have sweat dripping under your long johns as your adrenaline pumps through your veins. You can t wait to get to the bottom of the run and do it again. Lesson 7

29 Practice layering. Read the following topic sentence. With a partner take turns adding layers of sentences that DEVELOP the topic. Dessert is my favorite thing to order at McDonald s. See student sample - Dessert at McDonald s Lesson 7

30 More Practice with Layering In the following paragraph, discuss how all the sentences layer or develop the topic. Football season at JKHS is the best time of the year. Even though I don t play, football provides us all with something to do on Friday nights. Sometimes that means watching the football games; sometimes that means the after-game dance. My favorite football memory was after the game with MLHS. The ASB leaders made a huge bonfire for us to celebrate the win. It lasted until 2:00 a.m. when we went to Shari s for breakfast to plan the next football experience. Lesson 7

31 Remember layering looks like Sentences thoughtfully placed with the one main topic threaded through them... purposely explaining with the needs of the audience in mind. Lesson 7

32 Your Turn Choose one of the following two topics. Then write a paragraph and practice elaborating by layering each sentence and developing the main idea. The parking lot at High is where the real education takes place at school. is what I live for on the weekends. Lesson 7